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After some talks, I was advised to step away from my sketch book and try using a different medium on a bigger scale. I then got... -
Presentation 1 by Alfie Gunter on Scribd
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ReplyDeleteI feel your character design is a little undeveloped as the central themes of a broken down mechanical universe discussed over the course of this project, don’t not seem to have been explored. Your main character is charming and sympathetic but it would have been great to see gesture and expression sheets that define that more. Perhaps a badly performed trick, a frustrated, dejected or poignant expression. The expressions given seem disconnected to the concept art image which has much more emotion. It would also have been good to see the mechanical bird developed. Its a potentially interesting character which could add a lot of emotion to the character, or possible a touch of light relief to counter the sadness of the magician.
However your environment and storyboards need the most development. Your storyboards feel uninspired and pedestrian. They could benefit from more dramatic camera angles and pacing. The narrative is about the decline of the central character’s performance as a magician, so it is important to see both the magician and the audience reaction. by cutting between the reactions of the frustrated magician and the unimpressed crowd, the audience can understand the emotion of the story. If you had developed the environment fully, the central theme of a mechanical universe would also have been demonstrated.
Overall then, this project needs a little more love and development. It has potential, but at the moment the central themes and narrative are unclear. This is disappointing as your central character is appealing, so I would urge you to continue to develop this project to fully do it justice. - Justin