FSTS OGR 1 by Alfie Gunter on Scribd
Animation
Film review
Life Drawing
Maya
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
-
After some talks, I was advised to step away from my sketch book and try using a different medium on a bigger scale. I then got... -
Presentation 1 by Alfie Gunter on Scribd
OGR 26/01/18
ReplyDeleteHi Alfie - okay, so the BIG challenge for you is going to be getting all this information on screen in the run time available. I like the speedy way you set things up via the Penny Dreadful publication at the beginning, but if you read over your premise you'll note you've got a number of moments wherein you say the detective is figuring something out, but I wonder how the audience is meant to know what he does? A simple question - do you know what your murderer wants? Why is he killing people and what is the relationship between his motive and his role in the theatre - I think - until you understand this we won't be able to fully bring your story (and your ACT 3) in focus.
So - is your killer a disgruntled actor/director killing theatre critics by carving lines from a Shakespeare soliloquy onto their bodies - words from the performance the critics hated?
Is your killer a disgruntled make-up artist carving his victim's faces into particular faces - and his victims are all actors that became famous for their look without acknowledging the role of the make-up artist?
Once you better understand the relationship between the murderer and the murdered (and the link to the theatre) you'll be able to better 'show' the way in which the detective 'detects' - and also I think you'll have a better ending; for example, if your murderer if a frustrated performer jealous of the success of others and desperate to be in the limelight, then it makes sense that he/she would 'want' to be found out, so they can have their 'big scene' after all...